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)But she has some bad habits, too. She often eats junk food for breakfast. Sometimes she quarrels with her classmates in class. She doesn’t go home on time and she always watches TV or plays puter games for more than an hour in the evening. (This makes her parents unhappy. )I think Zhang Ying is a very good girl. Do you think so?YoursHuang Deshun【解析】試題分析:這是一篇提綱類作文,題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫作中注意將張穎的情況介紹清楚。根據(jù)材料可知,本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài),第三人稱進(jìn)行敘述,寫作中主語時(shí)態(tài)及主謂一致等問題。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn),做到語句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞。【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文在寫作中使用了很多固定句式,如:be glad to do sth高興做某事;a lot of許多;get up起床等。本文中時(shí)間詞如After supper,Sometimes,in the evening等的巧妙使用,使得本文看起來邏輯清楚,條理分明。在學(xué)習(xí)中,我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.考點(diǎn):考查提綱類作文7.寫作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文,標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”,請(qǐng)你寫一篇英文稿件,內(nèi)容需包括以下要點(diǎn):1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意:1.詞數(shù):100左右(題目不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))。【答案】Last summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析:這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文,需要逐條完成要點(diǎn)問題的回答,描述一次自己讓別人開心快樂的經(jīng)歷,是一篇記敘文,首先要讀懂5個(gè)問題,其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言和銜接手段把這五個(gè)問題的回答聯(lián)系在一起,變成一篇短文,同時(shí)也要注意在描述過去的故事的時(shí)候要正確運(yùn)用過去時(shí)態(tài)。寫作亮點(diǎn):既然這是一篇記敘文,就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事,需要加上必要的背景,指明時(shí)間(Last summer),地點(diǎn)(in rural area),簡(jiǎn)要概括事件(teach children English),這是文章首句的點(diǎn)睛之筆,信息量豐富。短語和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少,例如“adjust to…”(調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…),“as time went by”(隨著時(shí)間的流逝),“made great progress”(取得巨大進(jìn)步),“keep on learning”(繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)),“In a word”(總而言之)等等短語使用正確。在收尾部分表達(dá)了作者積極的人生態(tài)度,表示如果還有機(jī)會(huì)自己還樂于參與,這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整,表意更加清晰。8.李華的英國筆友Jessica來信說, 她想了解中國的傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日中秋節(jié)。假如你是李華, 請(qǐng)你給Jessica寫一封信, 介紹該節(jié)日。內(nèi)容須包含以下所有要點(diǎn):1. 中秋節(jié)的時(shí)間;2. 中秋節(jié)的傳統(tǒng)習(xí)俗及慶祝方式:全家人一起吃飯, 賞月, 吃月餅等;3, 我最期待的活動(dòng)。要求:〔開頭和結(jié)尾已給出, 不計(jì)入總詞數(shù));, 意思連貫, 書寫工整。Dear Jessica, I39。m glad to hear from you. Now let me introduce the MidAutumn Festival to Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Jessica,I39。m glad to hear from you. Now let me introduce the MidAutumn Festival to you. The MidAutumn Festival falls on the 15th of the 8th lunar month. It’s a big day for us Chinese people. All the family members get together to celebrate the festival. In the evening, we usually have a big dinner. And then we go outside and enjoy the full moon. The moon that night looks the brightest. With the beautiful moon up in the sky, we sit together to eat mooncakes, and share our stories.For me, the best part is to enjoy the moon and eat mooncakes. Mooncakes taste very delicious. They look like the moon, big and round.Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本篇寫作是以書信的方式向筆友介紹中國的傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日中秋節(jié),要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來寫。全文可分兩大部分,第一部分寫中秋節(jié)的時(shí)間、傳統(tǒng)習(xí)俗及慶祝方式,第二部分寫我最期待的活動(dòng)。亮點(diǎn)說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如get together,enjoy the full moon, share our stories等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,句子通順,行文連貫。9.同學(xué)們,初中生活即將結(jié)束,本次考試后,盼望已久的假期就要到來!請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示,制定出度假計(jì)劃,可以結(jié)合自己的實(shí)際發(fā)揮。 寫作內(nèi)容:,享受大自然的美景,放松心情。,幫家長做家務(wù)。 寫作要求: 詞左右,開頭部分已給出,但不計(jì)入規(guī)定字?jǐn)?shù)。;要點(diǎn)齊全;句子及篇章結(jié)構(gòu)正確、連貫;書寫規(guī)范。My junior high school years are ing to an end. The summer holiday is on the way. Here are my plans for the long exciting holidays.