【正文】 段。次段分五句，說明自己在專業(yè)上是個(gè)尖子生，并指出對(duì)于其他課程自己做得同樣出色，為將來的工作奠定了堅(jiān)實(shí)的基礎(chǔ)；后兩句說明自己參加了各種學(xué)?；顒?dòng)，培養(yǎng)了多方面的能力。第三段首句說明自己非常希望能早日獲得面試的機(jī)會(huì)；次句說如果對(duì)方太忙，可以打電話聯(lián)系；末句對(duì)對(duì)方表示感謝，是一句客套話。 　　首段中的keen表示“熱切的”， parallel這里做動(dòng)詞，表示“與……相當(dāng)，比得上”。第二段首句中的specialized area表示“專業(yè)領(lǐng)域”；第二句中的excel是不及物動(dòng)詞，表示“突出，超常，勝過他人”；第三句中的edge表示“優(yōu)勢(shì)”；第四句中的a variety of等于various,表示“多種多樣的”；第五句中的teamwork spirit表示“團(tuán)隊(duì)精神”，interpersonal skills表示“人際交往的能力”。范文5:People39。s Use of the Internet1. 上圖所示為2001年7月、2002年7月、2003年1月我國(guó)上網(wǎng)用戶總?cè)藬?shù)，請(qǐng)描述其變化； 2. 請(qǐng)說明發(fā)生這些變化的原因； 3．你認(rèn)為目前用戶在因特網(wǎng)使用中有什么困難或問題。 From the chart we can see clearly that the number of Internet surfers in our country has increased from million in July 2001 to million in July 2002, and then to million in January 2003.In my mind, the reasons why the Internet surfers are on the rise are as follows. First, the Internet can help us acplish many tasks, including both work and play—searching for information has bee more convenient than ever, and safe online business is no longer a dream. Besides, surfing the Internet is being cheaper and cheaper—more and more people can afford it.The negative effects of the Internet are also clear. To begin with, sitting too long before the puters is harmful to our body, especially our eyes. Second, more and more people bee indulged in playing video games or chatting online, which are timeconsuming.All in all, I should say the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The key lies in whether we can make good use of it to enhance both work and study.【點(diǎn)評(píng)】　　首段敘述從2001年至2003年我國(guó)上網(wǎng)用戶總?cè)藬?shù)的變化趨勢(shì)。第二段分兩方面給出其中的原因：首先是因特網(wǎng)方便快捷、作用巨大；其次是費(fèi)用降低。第三段分兩個(gè)方面指出面臨的困難和問題：首先是上網(wǎng)時(shí)間過長(zhǎng)有害健康；其次是有些人上網(wǎng)玩游戲、聊天，這都是不好的習(xí)慣。第四段做總結(jié)：第一句指出利大于弊；第二句說關(guān)鍵在于好好利用因特網(wǎng)。第二段首句中的in my mind意思是“依我看，在我看來”；第三段中的be harmful to意為“對(duì)……有傷害”，bee indulged in意思是“沉迷于”，timeconsuming是“浪費(fèi)時(shí)間”的意思；最后一段首句中的outweigh意為“比……重要”。李妍老師推薦 the examination is around the corner, I am pelled to give up doing sports.句意：既然考試迫在眉睫，我不得不放棄作運(yùn)動(dòng)。用be around the corner表示某事緊迫，用be pelled to 表示不得不怎樣,比have to好得多2. But people are often reproached for unpunctuality when their only fault is cutting things fine.句意：但人們則常常僅僅由于將時(shí)間安排得太緊而引起不準(zhǔn)時(shí)受到指責(zé)。unpunctuality一個(gè)直接表示否定意義的詞，用此表達(dá)簡(jiǎn)潔準(zhǔn)確， cutting things fine ：卡得太緊。一般很容易把此句寫出But people are often blamed just because they have arranged their agandas too heavy to be punctuality.3. Although being early may mean wasting a little time, this will be less than if you miss the train and have to wait an hour or more for the next one。 and avoid the frustration of arriving at the very moment when the train is drawing out of the station and being unable to get on it.句意：盡管早到可能意味著浪費(fèi)一點(diǎn)時(shí)間，但是比起你沒搭上車而不得不等一小時(shí)或更長(zhǎng)一些時(shí)間搭下一趟車所浪費(fèi)的時(shí)間要少些；而且又可避免因到達(dá)時(shí)火車剛開出車站沒搭上車所產(chǎn)生的失望。，其實(shí)是2個(gè)并列的句子，同時(shí)做了另外一種情況的比較，更有說服力。同時(shí)幾個(gè)單詞蠻好：drawing out of the station 一般都會(huì)說 about to leave, take off, very,這個(gè)詞用在這里感覺就是正好掐在那一個(gè)讓人覺得很悶郁的關(guān)鍵點(diǎn) avoid the frustration 動(dòng)詞的名詞形式，符合名詞化趨勢(shì)，即把表達(dá)句子中心意思的詞盡量用名詞表達(dá) be unable to 比couldn39。t, failed to, not successful這些用濫的好一點(diǎn)，而且這個(gè)更多的強(qiáng)調(diào)事情有沒有做成功4. The girl, tear streaming down her face, begged to be allowed to slip into the guard39。s van.句意：這個(gè)姑娘的臉上流下了眼淚，哀求讓她溜進(jìn)列車員的車廂?！皌ear streaming down her face” 獨(dú)立主格作狀語(yǔ)用得蠻好，slip這個(gè)動(dòng)詞用的也準(zhǔn)確生動(dòng)5. A single picture would tell usmore than thousands of words.這個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句可以用于很多寫作的論述中間。比如說電腦的作用：A simpleoperation on the puter would save us more than thousands of minutes.6． We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much. 句意：我們?cè)僭趺磸?qiáng)調(diào)保護(hù)眼睛的重要性也不為過?！?cannot emphasize the importance of ……too much.（再怎么強(qiáng)調(diào)...的重要性也不為過。）7. We should bring home to people the fact that the condition of our traffic leaves much to be desired句意：我們應(yīng)該讓人們知道我們的交通狀況令人不滿意?！白屇橙酥馈庇谩癰ring home to people”“讓人不滿意”用leave much to be desired表達(dá)8 The people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they cannot find them, make them. Such is the remark made by Bernard Shaw, a great writer. This view has been shared now by more and more people.句意：著名作家蕭伯納曾說過：在這個(gè)世界上取得成功的人，都努力去尋求他們想要的機(jī)會(huì)，如果找不到時(shí)，他們就自己創(chuàng)造機(jī)會(huì)。這一觀點(diǎn)現(xiàn)在正在被越來越多的人所接受。此類句子用以引用某人的話，另外，某觀點(diǎn)被越來越多人接受用be shared by more and more people9. Children with parents whose guidance is firm, consistent, and rational are inclined to possess high levels of selfconfidence.句意：父母的教導(dǎo)如果堅(jiān)定，理性，始終如一，孩子就有可能充滿自信。用be inclined to 表示有可能怎樣，用possess high levels of…… 表示滿懷……。 majority of students believe that parttime job will provide them with more opportunities to develop their interpersonal skills, which may put them in a favorable position in the future job markets.句意：大部分學(xué)生相信業(yè)余工作會(huì)使他們有更多機(jī)會(huì)發(fā)展人際交往能力，而這對(duì)他們未來找工作是非常有好處的。“使某人有更多機(jī)會(huì)……”用“provide sb with more opportunities