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study too long every day and suffer from great pressure. Last week, my class had a discussion on how to get relaxed and reduce the pressure。The students offered different good suggestions. As well as going to the movie, listening to music, even going sightseeing at the weekends, some students think it a good way to take exercise between lessons. After all, too long study without exercise is harmful to our health. Other students feel it important to municate with our parents. We can get help from them when we are in trouble.In my opinion, we should spend a little time developing our hobbies like reading or doing sports while working hard. In this way, we can get relaxed and reduce the pressure.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話(huà)題作文,主要講述如何減壓放松。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如as well as,a good way to,take exercise,after all,be harmful to,municate with,get help from,be in trouble,in my opinion,spend+時(shí)間+(in)doing以及in this way,增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話(huà)題是開(kāi)放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了,在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外,還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言,大小寫(xiě)是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。8.書(shū)面表達(dá)一日之計(jì)在于晨。同學(xué)們,沐浴在晨光中,行走在上學(xué)路上,當(dāng)我們有充足的時(shí)間安排一天的學(xué)習(xí)生活時(shí),你會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)每天早起一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)會(huì)給我們帶來(lái)許多好處。請(qǐng)你以“ It’s good to get up early”為題,寫(xiě)一篇90詞左右短文。要求:1. 包含所給信息,并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。2. 語(yǔ)句通順,意思連貫,書(shū)寫(xiě)整潔。3. 詞數(shù)90詞左右。開(kāi)頭已給,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。It’s good to get up earlyGetting up early is a good habit. It’s good for us in many ways.______________________________________________________________________________【答案】It’s good to get up earlyGetting up early is a good habit. It’s good for us in many ways. Firstly ,we can have enough time to plan a day better .Secondly,doing exercise is good for our health .Also, breathing the fresh air is good to our bodies and our moods, and it can help remember important things easily. Thirdly, having breakfast can help protect our stomachs ,make us have good health ,and have more energy to do all kinds of things better. In a word, the morning is the key of a day. Everyone should get up early every day.【解析】【詳解】本文是一篇話(huà)題作文。要求以“ It’s good to get up early”為題,寫(xiě)一篇90詞左右短文。文章時(shí)態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),人稱(chēng)主要為第一人稱(chēng)。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì),考生要做的就是用正確的英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料,不可遺漏要點(diǎn),并可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。在寫(xiě)作時(shí),注意緊扣主題,連句成篇,要層次清楚,要點(diǎn)分明,中心突出。同時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu),造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣;盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式,最好不要寫(xiě)太長(zhǎng)的復(fù)合句;盡量選取簡(jiǎn)單的易拼寫(xiě)的單詞,確保正確率;詞匯、句式要豐富多樣,可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查,確保正確無(wú)誤?!军c(diǎn)睛】點(diǎn)睛:首先認(rèn)真審題,看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn);然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容,列出寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá);然后緊扣要點(diǎn),動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作,在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中,要注意句與句、段與段之間的過(guò)渡,必要時(shí)可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞,使文章過(guò)渡平穩(wěn),自然流暢;最后,要仔細(xì)檢查有無(wú)單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)誤用等,還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言,大小寫(xiě)是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9.“書(shū)山有路勤為徑, 學(xué)海無(wú)涯苦作舟”, 成功不會(huì)從天而降, 美好的未來(lái)需要靠不斷努力來(lái)創(chuàng)造?某英文網(wǎng)站正在開(kāi)展以“天道酬勤” 為主題的征文活動(dòng)?假如你是李華, 請(qǐng)用英文寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿, 講述你通過(guò)勤奮, 取得進(jìn)步甚至成功的經(jīng)歷, 并談?wù)勀愕母惺?提示詞語(yǔ): diligence (勤奮), make progress, effort, proud提示問(wèn)題: ? What did you achieve by working hard?? What did you do to make it?? How did you feel about it?【答案】Diligence is a must for us to reach our goals. I never realized it until I tried every effort to win the English speech petition last year. It was quite a big challenge for me because I was not that confident about my oral English and I was shy to speak in public. To give a better performance, I made full use of my spare time to prepare for it. I recorded my lines and asked my foreign teacher to correct my pronunciation. Then I kept practising day and night. Besides, I seized every chance to speak in front of my family or friends. The more I practised, the more confident I became. In the end, I won the petition and got a prize. It was so great that all my efforts paid off. I felt so proud of myself.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇話(huà)題作文,根據(jù)材料中的相關(guān)信息介紹一下你通過(guò)勤奮, 取得進(jìn)步甚至成功的經(jīng)歷。所提供的材料中列舉了“書(shū)山有路勤為徑, 學(xué)海無(wú)涯苦作舟”, 成功不會(huì)從天而降, 美好的未來(lái)需要靠不斷努力來(lái)創(chuàng)造。主要從:你努力工作取得了什么成績(jī)??你是怎么做到的??你覺(jué)得怎么樣?這幾個(gè)方面去介紹。時(shí)態(tài)為一般過(guò)去時(shí),人稱(chēng)為第一人稱(chēng)。注意作文中必須包含材料和提示詞的所有信息,并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作時(shí),避免使用漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ),盡量使用我們熟悉的句子或短語(yǔ)。語(yǔ)法要正確,表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣,注意時(shí)態(tài)、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞,注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密,符合邏輯關(guān)系,表達(dá)具有條理性?!靖叻志湫鸵弧縄t was quite a big challenge for me because I was not that confident about my oral English and I was shy to speak in public. 這對(duì)我來(lái)說(shuō)是一個(gè)很大的挑戰(zhàn),因?yàn)槲覍?duì)自己的英語(yǔ)口語(yǔ)沒(méi)有那么自信,在公共場(chǎng)合說(shuō)話(huà)也很害羞。句子because I was not that confident about my oral English and I was shy to speak in 。【高分句型二】The more I practised, the more confident I became. 我練習(xí)得越多,就越自信。這句話(huà)用到了“the+比較級(jí),the+比較級(jí)”結(jié)構(gòu)。表示“越……,就越……”的意思。