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I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others’ help. I strongly believe helping others will fill our society with positive energy. As the saying goes, “The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine.”(113w)【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話(huà)題作文,描述對(duì)節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵(lì)大家相互幫助,并讓世界充滿(mǎn)正能量。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致,特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話(huà)題是開(kāi)放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了,在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外,還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言,大小寫(xiě)是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9.為配合學(xué)?!罢\(chéng)信教育”活動(dòng),學(xué)校英語(yǔ)報(bào)開(kāi)展了以“Try to be honest”為主題的征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面的內(nèi)容提示,寫(xiě)一篇征文稿。(1)列舉你班同學(xué)存在的不誠(chéng)實(shí)現(xiàn)象:抄作業(yè),考試作弊,說(shuō)謊話(huà)......。(2)簡(jiǎn)述誠(chéng)實(shí)的重要性,并用你的一次具體經(jīng)歷加以說(shuō)明。注意:(1)文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)。(2)詞數(shù)100左右。(3)短文首句僅供參考,不計(jì)入總數(shù)。參考詞匯:作弊cheat(v.)說(shuō)謊tell a lieTry to be honestTo be honest is one of the most treasured traditional values in _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Try to be honestTo be honest is one of the most treasured traditional values in China. The children are taught to be honest when they are very young. At schools the students are also instructed to be honest.However, with the development of society, we often hear plaints about dishonesty. Reports with the theme of dishonesty often appear in the media. For example, some people try to get rich and live a fortable life. But they do not work hard honestly, instead they cheat others. They sell something quite ordinary at a very high price. Some people’s delaying paying back the loan can serve as another example. Some people, including some college students, get loan from the bank, and promise to pay within, say, 3 years. However, they don’t do that.The dishonest people sometimes can get benefit from their behaviors. So some people assert that dishonesty can bring people benefit, while honesty only makes people suffer. Is that so? Definitely not. It is always true that honesty is the best policy. It pays to be honest. The cheater selling the treasure mentioned above will surely be disclosed and punished some day. On the contrary, if he had been honest, neither the buyer nor he himself would have suffered. The people who do not return money in time will sooner or later bee infamous, and will not get the money from others again. If he had acted differently, he would have earned respect and trust, meanwhile, the bank would not have suffered from loss.【解析】這是一篇誠(chéng)信征文,英語(yǔ)作文要注意人稱(chēng)和時(shí)態(tài),注意提供的觀點(diǎn)、材料,要注意句子的完整性,謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式,句子之間的銜接和過(guò)渡。英語(yǔ)作文,要忠實(shí)于材料,不必?cái)U(kuò)展,注意用好連詞,多用非謂語(yǔ),慎用較難的句型,一定不能寫(xiě)錯(cuò)句。