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效的方法。對于粗步掌握寫作技巧考生來說,借鑒優(yōu)秀作文,更進(jìn)一步完善自己的寫作技能,寫出具有個(gè)性的短文,也是十分必要的。第一段剖析:象樣卷中,開頭語:There is a consensus among people that a goal is what it takes to obtain personal goal is to individuals what a pass is to a travelling ship, under whose guidance we can find the right way to ,There is a consensus among people that(人們一致認(rèn)為),A is to B what C is to D(A對于B如同C對于D)兩句都為復(fù)合句,含有同位語從句、表語從句、定語從句,起到了點(diǎn)題,解釋題義的作用。1號作品中,開頭語:As is known to all, an appropriate goal can function as a light with which we can find our way leading to us to it es to this, one of my own experiences naturally flashed on my is known to all(眾所周之)隨后點(diǎn)明題義,雖常見但不落俗套,又很貼切。When it es to this, one of my own experiences naturally flashed on my mind.(談及此,我腦海的自然閃現(xiàn)一次經(jīng)歷)還沒有找到寫作竅門同學(xué),趕緊背吧,一用就靈。4號作品中,開頭語:Occasions are quite rare when you can attain your ambitions without a precise possible and appropriate goal as well as perseverance is what it takes to are quite rare whenwithout—(沒有準(zhǔn)確的目標(biāo),你實(shí)現(xiàn)抱負(fù)的時(shí)機(jī)是很少的),――what it takes to succeed.(和毅力一樣,合適的目標(biāo)是成功具備的條件),作者采用先抑后揚(yáng)的方式,既起到了點(diǎn)題的作用,又體現(xiàn)了詞匯語句的多樣性和語言表達(dá)的得體性。過去我們僅僅提倡學(xué)生們在作文使用“完成句子”中學(xué)到語法和詞匯知識(shí),現(xiàn)在我們給你指明一條更為捷徑的方法,還等什么,快熟記吧,用在下一次的作文中。5號作品中,開頭語:It is no exaggeration to say that everyone need a goal in life, which leads us to the right my perspective, if we don’t have a goal, we will be at a loss what to do is no exaggeration to say(毫不夸張地說,每個(gè)人生活中都需要目標(biāo))In my perspective(在我看來,如果沒有目標(biāo),我們對下一步做什么就不知所措)與4號作品恰恰相反,作者先揚(yáng)后抑,用到了exaggeration和perspective兩個(gè)較高級的詞匯,是作者的語言功底深厚,還是背誦了什么作文模板,無需考證,這次他用了得了高分,下次你用了你也得高分,Go for ,開頭語:It is an indisputable fact that a goal plays as important a role as water does in our a goal, never will we succeed in the petitive society, nor will we have enough motivations to make our dreams e is an indisputable fact thatas important a role as(不可爭議的事實(shí)是,目標(biāo)所起作用跟我們生活中的水一樣重要)高級詞語indisputable和plays as important a role as 的得體使用,既增添了語勢,顯出考生深厚的語言功底,又主題鮮明。never will we succeednor will we have(沒有目標(biāo),在競爭激烈的社會(huì)我們既不會(huì)成功,又不會(huì)有足夠的動(dòng)力去實(shí)現(xiàn)我們的夢想。)接著倒裝句的正確使用和高級詞語petitive 和motivations的正確使用,更進(jìn)一步地取悅了閱卷老師,五檔非他莫屬。12號作品中,開頭語:As a saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way.” Our life way is actually determined by our inner ambitions, which allows you to excavate your superiority in every aspect you like and paveds the way for your success.(正如諺語所說:有競者,事竟成。我們的生活道路是由內(nèi)心的雄心抱負(fù)所決定的,這使我們(你們應(yīng)換成我們)發(fā)揮出我們的優(yōu)勢,為我們成功鋪平道路。(pavdes應(yīng)改為pave)As a saying goes,諺語的貼切使用和高級詞語excavate our superiority, pave the way 的正確使用,無不顯出考生駕馭語言的能力。相比之下,我們還停留在把簡單句寫正確,嘗試使用復(fù)雜句式的寫作起步階段。慚愧之余,我們要面對現(xiàn)實(shí),趕快行動(dòng)起來,背誦、模仿,在我們的下一次作文中,能見到正確、得體使用這些高級詞語和復(fù)雜句式。第二段剖析:縱觀十六篇優(yōu)秀作文,全部采用經(jīng)典的三段。接下來我們來剖析第二段,這一段非常重要,這是因?yàn)楦呖家辉購?qiáng)調(diào)考生要結(jié)合事例,也就是說高考側(cè)重考查考生的觀察校園生活,洞察社會(huì),在此基礎(chǔ)上考查考生綜合運(yùn)用英語語言的能力,這是其一;其二,結(jié)合事例敘述,能防止考生因猜題、壓題,大量訓(xùn)練而導(dǎo)致的雷同試卷,把平時(shí)訓(xùn)練的作文稍加改寫拿來濫竽充數(shù),高考作文命題其目的是想考查考生真實(shí)的語言運(yùn)用能力。所以,我們還要提醒同學(xué)們要慎用、靈活地使用這些所謂的作文模板。樣卷中,第二段:Let me take Yu Minhong’s experience as an example to illustrate my had been hoping to enter the Peking University for a long time, but bombed on his first as he was, he didn’t give up his the whole next year, he studied more industriously than ever , he failed withstanding, he was so determined that nothing could weaken his tried even harder and ultimately achieved his was the goal that encouraged him to get over all the obstacles and harvest his final ,97詞。第一句起著承上啟下的作用,讓我以俞敏洪的經(jīng)歷為例來闡明我的觀點(diǎn),同時(shí)illustrate my illumination為高級詞語,不下真功夫是難以企及的。接下來的六句,我們可以按照事情發(fā)展的基本程序:發(fā)生、發(fā)展、高潮和結(jié)局來分析,事件發(fā)生的階段是:他一直以來都希望上北京大學(xué),但事與愿違,考砸了。雖然很失望,但他并沒有放棄目標(biāo)。Bomb an exam相當(dāng)于fail an exam是很地道的英語。事件發(fā)展的階段是:接下來的一整年,他更加勤奮,但不幸的是他又失敗了。兩句都是簡單句,句雖短但表達(dá)很貼切,加之,使用了industriously(hard)高級詞語,增添了文采。事件的高潮階段是:他忍耐不住,他決心之大以致什么也不能削弱他的決心。高級詞語withstanding 和weaken his resolve的恰當(dāng)使用,無不彰顯了考生深厚的語言功底。事件的結(jié)局是:他更加努力,并最終實(shí)現(xiàn)了目標(biāo)。簡簡單單的一句話就結(jié)束了敘述。最后一句對整個(gè)事件加以總結(jié):是目標(biāo)鼓勵(lì)了他克服困難,收獲了成功。觀察上文,我們不難發(fā)現(xiàn),考生很善于使用較高級的詞語。2號作品中,第二段首句:My own experience can serve as a vivid ,是非常貼切的,同學(xué)們要很好加以利用。3號作品中,第二段首句:Iwould like to share a real story with you to prove the ,仿佛要敘述一段真實(shí)的故事。4號作品中,第二段首句:A memory can never fade away from my was a time when這兩句是值得套用的。5號作品中,第二段首句:When it es to this, I can’t help recalling one of my own was a time when很值得模仿。10號作品中,第二段首句:A piece of memory, which always kept me convinced of how much a goal counts, never fades 。11號作品中,第二段首句:Never in my mind have I