【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 ion. The writer presents his/her idea quite clearly in the first part, but it is not appropriate to say “wiser” since there is nothing else to pare with. So it is a big mistake in the thesis and there is also a problem of ma splices in this sentence. Although the anization is clear, the content of body paragraphs is not good as support. Transitions are not used properly here to link two points of the body as “on one hand… on the other hand” should be used to introduce two aspects of different opinions. Besides, two supporting points are very weak without convincing details. Worst of all, many sentences are of grammatical mistakes and vague expressions, which cause occasional difficulties for the reader’s understanding. But anyway, for most part the essay still displays some ability to use the language with appropriateness.Sample 4 (7 Points) Is It Wise to Make Friends Online? People would like to make the best of Inter to broaden their minds, they can get large information, they can play interesting games, even they can mak friends online. While a question has been arisen: “Is it wise to make friends on line?” The Inter is not reality, you can not trust a person through the Inter. Now I would not like to talk about the advantages of the Inter, while the disadvantages you can not deny is existing. Many people make the most of it to do bad things, such as trick you that he is need of money eagerly and wise you would help him as a friend, or character as your friend to inform your family that you are in danger and need money to save you, etc. All the things can be seen on the newspapers magazines, etc. So it is unwise to trust a so called online friend. I can Jump to the conclude that it is unwise to make friends online, because it is not reality, also we can not trust others without knowing the person well. So let’s do utmost to make the base use of the advantages of the Inter. Cherish the friends around us! Analysis This writing is just of a passing mark. On the whole, the language in this writing sounds choppy and there are many vague sentences with lots of grammatical mistakes. The writer does not present a clear view in the first part but just raises a question, which confuses the reader a lot. Although there are three parts, the anization is not clear since nearly no transitions are used to connect paragraphs and sentences. There are obvious gaps in the logic. The second part, which is supposed to provide good support for the main idea, is posed of many vague sentences and sentences with mistakes on grammar, spelling, collocation, part of speech, etc. The reader will experience some difficulty in reading the essay.Sample 5 (5 Points) Is It wise to make friends online? I think it is wise to make friends online. First, now job’s pressure more and more. Everyone cann’t better talk face to face. Second, friends online may speak everything of them. Third, friends online may help something of them and solve some problem. The forth, friends online may gain more knowledge and information. All in all, make friends online is wise in the society. Make friends online cann’t change a 潮流 . Everyone may enjoy everyone with his friends online!Analysis This essay is poorly written. First, the essay only has the point but no support. The writer presents his/her opinion at the very beginning, but after that he/she just makes a list of four points which are very obscure and lacking in supporting details. Second, almost all sentences contain errors of grammar, vocabulary, punctuation or syntax. Even the title is not capitalized. Generally, the essay is posed of Chenglish, even Chinese characters. Besides, the number of words is less than what is required in the test. In addition, this writing has neither an anizational structure nor coherence. All the sentences are arranged at random. Therefore, even after considerable effort on the part of the reader, the text is largely inprehensible.Original Tests of Compositions2022 SECTION A COMPOSITION (35 MIN)Travel has bee part of our life. And more and more of us have e to know the significance of travel through our experience.Write a position of about 150 words on the following topic:TRAVEL BROADENS THE MINDYou are to write in three paragraphs:In the first part, state what the topic actually means to you.In the second part, give one or two examples to illustrate your ideas.In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.Marks will be awarded for content, anization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow these instructions may result in the loss of marks.SampleTravel Broadens the MindThe title reminds me the famous saying that read thousands of books is not better than travel thousands of miles. Our ancestors realized the importance of traveling to different places to broaden the mind in ancient times. By traveling, we can meet various people and different kinds of things and we will be filled with wonder seeing the rich diversity of our world. In this sense, travel enriches our knowledge and broadens our mind. When I feel tired and bored with my routine life, I would choose to go traveling. And the best place is the seaside. Whenever I am facing the vast seas, I can’t help wondering how extensive and profound the sea is. The sight of the magnificent sea broadens my mind and makes me free from all the worries and vexations in life. By traveling, we can also accumulate all kinds of knowledge. We will learn the custom, religious belief, tradition, history and life style of different places and regions. Surely, our knowledge is enriched.So when traveling, we are surely to experience something new. Not only is our knowledge en