【正文】 很多學校都會要求學生提交35篇不等的Essay，其中12篇是主Essay。原文地址：：美國大學申請?zhí)斓澜逃谖迤好绹髮W申請文書的留學個人陳述立思辰留學360介紹，美國名校以優(yōu)質的教育資源，吸引著眾多的留學生。簡潔明快：美國大學申請文章以簡潔明快為好。他們讓我真實的看到這樣一群善良的人受到不平等的對待，而我不能坐視不理。他們的房子小、而且陰暗，里面的家具只有幾張木頭做的椅子、一張桌子及幾張床。我常常排著隊。我在Cadillo生活的那家人待我如親人，讓我體驗了一番他們的生活是什么樣子。if I am prepared and act with confidence, I will be perceived as are the little lessons that I’m grateful to have learned as a woman to Notice About This Essay author tells an interesting story about her experiences as a sense of her personality—determination, flexibility, good humor—es through in the like “Do you have a hot date tonight, ref?” make the narration memorable(we’d love to hear more of these kinds of details). essay needs a faster first paragraph(three sentences)says the same thing in both the first and third sentences—and gives away the essay’s surprise in the second!A good revision would delete all of paragraph one and start at paragraph ’s too much frame here and not enough essay needs further development, especially about the difficulties of being and being a ref, to keep it author should “dwell” in the meaning of the experience a little more at the end—“I wonder about…I also think…Sometimes I believe….” Significant experiences like this one, woven through many years of the author’s life, don’t mean just one thing—there are more insights and lessons to explore here.第四篇：美國大學申請文書的5個寫作技巧（模版）美國大學申請文書的5個寫作技巧每個學校都要求申請人寫規(guī)定了主題的美國大學申請文書。而中國學生使用復雜長句，更能體現其英語的成熟。如果申請者的個人簡歷，只是簡單的羅列個人資料，或者隨便堆砌一些內容，這樣的個人簡歷是很難打動招生委員會的。美國留學申請文書中的個人簡歷除了留學個人陳述之外，個人簡歷也是文書準備中不可缺少的一部分，個人簡歷要求美國留學申請者，在一頁到兩頁的篇幅內，簡單明了地展示個人情況、教育背景、實習經歷、工作經歷、獲獎情況等信息，使錄取委員會對申請者有一個直觀了解。句式要多樣：避免通篇使用短句，短句固然簡潔清新，但用多了略顯幼稚。little did I know that I was beginning an activity that would influence my character and who I am I began, I would only work with my dad and was friendly and accepting because I had just soon realized though that to get better I needed to start refereeing with people I wasn’t related to, and that’s when my experience drastically apologetic smile and an “I’m sorry” wasn’t going to get me through games I began officiating higherlevel games and dealing with more arrogant coaches, I suddenly entered a new maledominated world, a world I had never experienced confidence was shot, and all I wanted to do was get through each game and be able to I was even too scared to skate along the teams’ benches because I would get upset by what the coaches would yell to me.“Do you have a hot date tonight, ref?” was a typical ment that coaches would spit at me during the course of a their eyes, I did not belong on that ice, and they were going to do whatever they could do to make sure no women wanted to officiate their was determined not to let them chase me off the made the decision to stand up for never responded rudely to the coaches, but I did not let them walk all over me and destroy my confid