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【正文】 charged for parks. 正： People should pay for the entrance fee if they go to the parks. 2 句子之間的邏輯關(guān)系不清 誤： It hit the old man down but the driver, a woman, didn’t stop her car. Finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away. The old man and I saw the car’s number. It’s AC864. The old man couldn’t move , I decided to help him. 正： It hit the old man down but the driver, who was a woman, didn’t stop her car. Finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away. Fortunately, I saw the car’s number. It’s AC864. Noticing the old man couldn’t move, I decided to help him. 3畫蛇添足 、過多的長句使句子復(fù)雜化 （語言不簡潔） 修改前： A famous sportsman was giving a speech which was rather interesting. 修改后： A famous sportsman was giving an interesting speech. 修改前 Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. The air pollution is being more and more serious which is caused by buses and cars. What’s more, so many rivers are polluted by dirty water which is from factory. In addition, sandstorm struck us now and then, from which we suffered a lot. 修改后 Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. As a result, people have to suffer sandstorms now and then. What’s more, as buses and cars give off a lot of poisonous
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