【正文】 寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：短文開(kāi)頭直奔主題：我想要談?wù)勎业臒兰霸鯓犹幚硭麄?；后面三段分別從外貌上的煩惱、與父母交流上的障礙、學(xué)習(xí)上的壓力幾方面分別談?wù)撟约旱臒兰疤幚淼姆绞?，生?dòng)具體，條理分明。假設(shè)你是李華，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表提示，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿，在班會(huì)上談?wù)勀阌龅降臒酪约澳阕约旱淖龇??！敬鸢浮縊ne possible versionDear Mary,I’m very glad to introduce（介紹） my classmate Zhang Ying to you. She is a 14yearold girl. She has a lot of good habits. She gets up early every morning. In class she likes to ask her teachers some questions. After school she always exercises （for a long time）. After supper she helps her parents with housework. （She is really a good girl. ）But she has some bad habits, too. She often eats junk food for breakfast. Sometimes she quarrels with her classmates in class. She doesn’t go home on time and she always watches TV or plays puter games for more than an hour in the evening. （This makes her parents unhappy. ）I think Zhang Ying is a very good girl. Do you think so?YoursHuang Deshun【解析】試題分析：這是一篇提綱類(lèi)作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。全文可分兩大部分，第一部分寫(xiě)中秋節(jié)的時(shí)間、傳統(tǒng)習(xí)俗及慶祝方式，第二部分寫(xiě)我最期待的活動(dòng)。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。但為提升作文檔次，應(yīng)穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句，或使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，如非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等。t get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of afterclasses on weekends.句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。另外注意句式結(jié)構(gòu)要符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣，用完整的句子表達(dá)。未來(lái)展望1. 升上理想的學(xué)校；2. 能結(jié)識(shí)更多朋友；3. 請(qǐng)你補(bǔ)充（至少兩點(diǎn)）My Life At SchoolHow time flies! It39。點(diǎn)睛：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。Dear classmates,Reading is very important in our daily life. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Let’s start reading now!【答案】Reading is very important in our daily life． First of all，reading will/can help us get knowledge from all kinds of books．It can also help to open up a whole new world to us．Second，reading will/can make us clever and happy．It is good for our study and it can help us grow up．Third，reading can help us think more and further and make our life more colourful． However，there is usually so much homework for us to do that we don39。內(nèi)容包括：學(xué)生近視原因：（not enough）、做作業(yè)、用電腦等（for a long time）防止近視的方法：，多進(jìn)行體育活動(dòng)（eye exercises）（have the good habit of）個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)：如：我認(rèn)為，我們應(yīng)該了解保護(hù)眼睛的重要性，盡最大努力保護(hù)我們的眼睛。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)?！靖叻志湫投縋rotecting the environment is our duty. 保護(hù)環(huán)境是我們的職責(zé)。所提供的材料中列舉了近年來(lái)，各大城市霧霾（haze）情況越來(lái)越嚴(yán)重，主要從空氣污染的現(xiàn)象，原因，應(yīng)對(duì)措施三個(gè)方面去介紹。（至少寫(xiě)2點(diǎn)）（2） 空氣污染產(chǎn)生的原因。（至少寫(xiě)2點(diǎn)）（3）減少空氣污染的措施。時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。這里Protecting the environment 做主語(yǔ)，用的是動(dòng)詞的ing形式。3． 最近一份學(xué)生體質(zhì)健康調(diào)查結(jié)果顯示，學(xué)生近視率仍維持在高位水平，且越來(lái)越低齡化。（I think ???；try one39。t have enough time for reading．Moreover，some of us don39。5．書(shū)面表達(dá)隨著電子時(shí)代的到來(lái)，西方文化如潮水般涌來(lái)，中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化的傳承面臨著巨大的挑戰(zhàn)。開(kāi)頭介紹了中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化面對(duì)的問(wèn)題，接下來(lái)介紹我認(rèn)為開(kāi)設(shè)傳統(tǒng)文化課的必要性的原因，最后號(hào)召更多的學(xué)校開(kāi)設(shè)傳統(tǒng)文化課。s unbelievable that I39。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡(jiǎn)單句為基礎(chǔ)，穿插并列句、復(fù)合句以及其他復(fù)雜句式的使用，提升作文檔次。語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確、得體，表達(dá)自然、流暢。 I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies.語(yǔ)句之間使