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leaner. The houses are big and bright. Many people have moved into new apartments. More and more people have their own cars and live a fortable life. The new airport has been in use for two years. There are thousands of tourists from all over the country every hope my hometown is being more and more beautiful.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以The Changes in My Hometown為題,介紹一下自己的家鄉(xiāng)這些年來發(fā)生的變化。表達(dá)時,需要注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯表格中的語句,而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型來表達(dá)。文章是按照時間的順序,先介紹了家鄉(xiāng)過去的面貌,這一部分使用了過去時態(tài),謂語動詞都變成了過去式,形式準(zhǔn)確。文章中語言得體,語句通順,句式表達(dá)符合英語的習(xí)慣,語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。常 識歷史悠久,深受喜愛世界杯4年舉行一次好 處男生女生皆可參加利于培養(yǎng)團(tuán)隊精神考生自擬(至少1點)偶 像梅西,有足球天賦夢 想考生自擬(至少1點)注意:1. 詞數(shù)90左右。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語,按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。為了使生活更美好,社會需要正能量(positive energy)。2.語句連貫,詞數(shù)80個左右。亮點說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別適用一些亮點詞句,如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點,詞數(shù)符合要求。初寫短文。修改潤色。假設(shè)你是李華,請根據(jù)下表提示,用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿,在班會上談?wù)勀阌龅降臒酪约澳阕约旱淖龇?。Hello everyone,Hello everyone,I am Li Hua. I’d like to talk about my problems and how I deal with them. That’s all. Thank you!【答案】Hello everyone,I am Li Hua. I’d like to talk about my problems and how I deal with them.I am not very tall and very mon. But I don’t care and I believe in myself.My parents don’t understand me and I have very few friends. I encourage myself to be kind to others and learn to municate with others very well.I often feel stressed because of my study and I don’t have many chances to join the afterclass activities. I will plan my time very carefully and improve my study in a very good way. Try to join as many activities as possible and achieve a balance between study and hobbies.That’s all. Thank you!【解析】試題分析:本題是一篇給材料作文,要求用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿,在班會上談?wù)勀阌龅降臒酪约澳阕约旱淖龇?。寫作亮點:短文開頭直奔主題:我想要談?wù)勎业臒兰霸鯓犹幚硭麄?;后面三段分別從外貌上的煩惱、與父母交流上的障礙、學(xué)習(xí)上的壓力幾方面分別談?wù)撟约旱臒兰疤幚淼姆绞剑鷦泳唧w,條理分明。俱樂部的同學(xué)們很喜歡網(wǎng)購圖書這種便捷的方式,并打算在本周五交流讀書后的感受。(2)本周五的下午3點,大家將共同交流讀書的體會。2可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié),使內(nèi)容充實,行文連貫。Last Friday,we had a reading party, which was held on Friday in our reading room. Then we are going to hold an activity to share the feeling with others at 3:00 on Friday afternoon. All of us are fond of buying books on the Internet. We are going to buy some books on the Internet next month. As far as I am concerned, on the one hand, the books on the Internet are cheaper than those in the bookstore. On the other hand, there are all kinds of books, so we needn’t go from one bookstore to another .Best wishes!Yours,Cathy【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,向外教介紹俱樂部中讀書交流會的活動,并且告訴外教同學(xué)們現(xiàn)在喜歡網(wǎng)購圖書并闡述網(wǎng)購圖書的好處?!军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。同學(xué)主要觀點你的觀點努力學(xué)習(xí)尊重父母服務(wù)社會計劃未來……(至少兩條)注意:(1)短文必須包括表中所有內(nèi)容,可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié);(2)你的觀點至少兩條;(3)詞數(shù):80—100;(4)短文首句僅供選擇使用,不計入總詞數(shù)。寫作亮點:短文用了一些短語和句式,如:do a survey about sth關(guān)于某事做調(diào)查;respect their parents,尊敬他們的父母;look after照顧;make a good plan for sth為某事做一個好的計劃;make some good friends交一些好朋友;keep healthy保持健康