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_________________________________________________________________________Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua, a middle school student learning in Grade 3 in China. I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter vacation. I hope to have a chance to visit London Canal Museum. From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals”February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter Camp. And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn Canal. What’s more, I hope to learn more about London Canal Museum and even more about the UK.I’m looking forward to your reply!Yours,Li Hua【解析】這篇作文要求我們以中學(xué)生李華的身份,給Liz Payne寫一個(gè)留言。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個(gè)部分:首先是介紹自己的身份;然后寫留言的目的,包括冬令營的時(shí)間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽Liz Payne的講座;最后簡單介紹一下你的預(yù)期的收獲。寫作時(shí),應(yīng)根據(jù)題目的這些要求,組織語言,串聯(lián)成一篇短文。通過分析可知,這篇短文應(yīng)使用第一人稱I來敘述,時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)以一般將來時(shí)態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。注意英語句子的表達(dá)和漢語習(xí)慣是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,使用正確的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以及適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型,保證句子的準(zhǔn)確性和語言的地道。另外還應(yīng)注意語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫。穿插一些高級詞匯和復(fù)雜句式,提升文章檔次和水平,使表達(dá)更加流暢。點(diǎn)睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目要求的所有信息,沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。作者主要從三個(gè)方面敘述:首先介紹了自己的身份和寫留言的目的;接下來詳細(xì)介紹了自己參加這次冬令營的愿望;最后是一個(gè)簡單的結(jié)尾。如果分段敘述效果則會(huì)更好,那樣會(huì)使文章的層次更加清晰。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,文章以第一人稱、一般將來時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主,謂語動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)發(fā),語法規(guī)范,符合英語句子的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主,也使用了一些復(fù)合句和較高級的句型,如I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter ;From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals” February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter ;And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn 。整篇文章語句通順、意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。4.書面表達(dá)假如你是華,你的英國筆友對中國文化很感興趣,想到中國旅行感受中國文化。你想請他來你的家鄉(xiāng)一安徴一游,請你根據(jù)以下提示用英文給他寫一封電子郵件。1位置:中國東部,安做省南部: :春暖花開,秋季涼爽:山和古村落: :茶、黃梅戲提示詞:黃梅戲 Huangmei Opera注意:,使行文連貫。,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)Dear DaveI know that you are interested in Chinese culture and Im glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my home town, to have fun?【答案】Dear Dave,I know you are interested in Chinese culture and I’m glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my hometown, to have some fun.Anhui Province lies in the east of China. The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats. There are many famous places to see. For example, Mt. Huangshan, where you will see wonderful plants and special rocks. Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on. As a fan of Chinese culture, don’t forget to try green tea in Anhui which smells good and tastes better. What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!Wele to Anhui! I’m looking forward to seeing you here!Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給自己的筆友Dave寫信,邀請他來你的家鄉(xiāng)—安徽一游,題目中列出了文章的提綱,審題可知,短文應(yīng)從以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容敘述:首先介紹家鄉(xiāng)的位置;然后介紹來這里最好的時(shí)候;接下來是介紹家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化,并給出建議。短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),注意謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)合理安排幾個(gè)內(nèi)容,分清主次,并注意上下文的連貫。另外,英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的,因此寫作時(shí)不能按照漢語思維逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā),寫完整的句子。如可以使用簡單句結(jié)構(gòu),易于掌握,不容易出錯(cuò)。但為提升文章檔次,也應(yīng)穿插一些并列句結(jié)構(gòu)或復(fù)合句,以及使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu),如非謂語動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語態(tài)等?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求邀請Dave來自己的家鄉(xiāng)旅游,并介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn):首先文章內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容,并對細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充和修飾,使內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)、豐富。短文先對Dave發(fā)出邀請,然后具體介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的位置、景點(diǎn)、文化等,并提出了建議。全文敘述清晰,層次清楚,主次分明。第二,短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱,語法規(guī)范,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整,符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來敘述,注意了謂語動(dòng)詞第三人稱單數(shù)形式的變化。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主,也使用了并列句、賓語從句、狀語從句等復(fù)合句,還有一些好的句型,如The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats、Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on.、What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!、I’m looking forward to seeing you here!等。5.書面表達(dá)假如你是李華,你們學(xué)校正在進(jìn)行課堂教學(xué)改革,經(jīng)過一