【正文】 ：Meanwhile, I’ll spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the ：全國人民都不遺余力地支持北京舉辦奧運會?！炯丫渑R摩】：To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major ：令人更迷惑不解的是，很多飛機都從大海上離奇消失了。[6]“我保證…”，that引導同位語從句。[4]過渡銜接詞語，使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。[2]“超出…的能力范圍”。保證合理利用貸款并表明還款決心，最后表示感謝。根據所給提綱，本文應包含如下內容：簡單介紹自己的情況，表明寫信目的：申請助學貸款。___________________________________________________________________________：Therefore, college students should attach more importance to cultivating a good character rather than pursuing famous ：很多同學經常玩電腦游戲，這是浪費時間，而不是一種有益的放松方式。【佳句臨摹】：It is irrational for college students to pursue famous ：對大學生來說，了解校園以外的世界是非常必要的。not…but連接并列成分。beyond表示“超出…范圍”。[6] it為形式主語，不定式為真正主語。[3] follow表示“跟隨，追求(趨勢或時尚)”[4]用于引出原因。Students’ Pursuit for Famous BrandsNowadays many college students like to pursue famous clothes to mobile phones, even study articles like electronic dictionaries and pens, they [1]are inclined to buy famous brands.[2]Moreover, many students from poor families begin to [3]follow this consumption trend as phenomenon has aroused wide attention.[4]The following reasons can account for college students’ preference for famous brands.[2]Above all, in many college students’ eyes, a famous brand is a symbol of sophistication and expect others to admire their high class and good taste.[2]What’s more, in modern society, famous brands to some extent are equal to fashion, [5]which has a great attraction to young college students.[2]Besides, parents’ spoiling their children helps form their bad consumption habit.[2]As far as I am concerned, [6]it is irrational for college students to pursue famous brands.[3]After all, most of famous brands are [7]far beyond their consumption ability.[3]Besides, [8]it is not famous brands but a person’s noble character that really makes him high class.[3]Therefore, college students should attach more importance to cultivating a good character [9]rather than pursuing famous brands.【亮點點評】[1]“有…傾向”。分析大學生熱衷名牌的原因。提綱第1點指出一種現(xiàn)象，提綱第2點要求分析產生這種現(xiàn)象的原因，提綱第3點要求談談“我”對該現(xiàn)象的看法，由此可判斷本文應為現(xiàn)象解釋型作文。：From my point of view, we should be more rational when it es to ：我認為，對于我們來說，更重要的是盡可能提高自己的能力而不是獲得更多的證書?！炯丫渑R摩】：You may get the answer that he or she is preparing for a certificate of some ：離婚率上升盡管令人難過，但卻是不爭的事實。[10]“只是，僅僅”。[8]“當談到或提及…時”。[6]which引導非限制性定語從句，充當介詞賓語。[4]設問句引出原因，容易引起注意。[2]限定詞使用恰當，使文章表達更嚴謹，增強了說服力。Certificate Craze on CampusIn recent years, getting a certificate has bee a new craze among college students.[1]Just randomly ask a student on campus what he or she is busy doing, [2]quite possibly, you may get the answer [3]that he or she is preparing for a certificate [2]of some kind.[4]Why does this craze appear?[4]There are mainly two reasons behind this , [5]it is the employment pressure that forces college students to get more the admission expansion of colleges, a lot more graduates have to face the fierce petition in the job can one make himself more petitive? More certificates at hand, , diploma and certificates are still important standards [6]by which many employers measure a person’s order to increase the qualifications for a job, the students pel themselves to run from one exam to another.[7]From my point of view, we should be more rational [8]when it