【正文】 資料共分享，我們負責傳遞知識。
Dear Bob,
I’m so glad that you are ing to learn Chinese here. I’ve already found you a house near our school. I’d like to tell you something about it.
You may get on bus at Fang Cao Street and the next stop is just Jian Xin Chinese School. The house is near the school. It is about 25 square metres. In the bedroom, there is a bed, a sofa standing against the wall and a table near the window. You may find a light on the table and a chair next to it. There are two other rooms connecting the bedroom. The left one is a bathroom and the right one is a kitchen. So you may cook by yourself. The rent for the house is 500 yuan per month. Hope you’ll enjoy staying here!
Yours,
Li Hua
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本文內(nèi)容具體，詳略得當，表述方式很有創(chuàng)造力和新意，長短句并用，語言結(jié)構(gòu)富于變化，錯落有致，順暢圓潤，尤其是情態(tài)動詞和分詞的運用很獨到，為文章增色不少。由外及內(nèi)，層次分明，錯落有致。
Dear Bob,
Wele to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.
I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It is on the third floor and there’re three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.
Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the bus at the busstop in front of the
building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the airport, see you.
Best wishes !
Yours, Li Hua
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本文格式正確，內(nèi)容完整，表述清楚，銜接緊密流暢，時態(tài)語態(tài)使用準確，特別是結(jié)尾末段適度的發(fā)揮，既充實了內(nèi)容，又符合邏輯，成為本文與眾不同的亮點。
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I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 squaremetres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.
Hope you will e here soon!
All the best!
Yours, Li Hua
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本文格式正確，意思表述完整，行文流暢自然。
一、如何提建議—— 給交友有困難的同學提建議
I am sorry you are having trouble in making friends.
【引出建議】Here are some tips to help you.
【列舉建議】First, why not go and talk to people standing on their own. I agree this is difficult but that person may be lonely too. If you do this, I am sure you will soon have a new friend. Second, you can begin the conversation by asking about their likes and dislikes,【理由】which will make you find people with the same interests. Finally, you should try to join in a discussion, 【理由】letting people know how friendly you are. I hope you will find these ideas useful.
二、列舉個例 —— 良好飲食習慣
As we all know, we are what we eat. Therefore, it’s important for us to form healthy eating habits. However, some students have formed a variety of bad eating habits, such as not having breakfast, loving eating snacks, being particular about food, eating and drinking too much and so on, which will surely do harm to their health. To keep healthy, we should have healthy diets. Not only should we have various foods, like fish, meat, vegetables, fruits as well as rice, noodles, but also we should have the foods regularly and properly. Personally, I think it is important to keep a healthy diet, which contributes to building up a strong body. Only in this way can we have enough energy to study better.
三、舉例說明 —— 和諧師生關(guān)系對你的影響
【要證明的觀點】Actually, having a good relationship with teachers makes it easier for us to get along smoothly with our study at school. 【引出例子】Take