【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 um. From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals”February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter Camp. And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn Canal. What’s more, I hope to learn more about London Canal Museum and even more about the UK.I’m looking forward to your reply!Yours,Li Hua【解析】這篇作文要求我們以中學(xué)生李華的身份，給Liz Payne寫一個(gè)留言。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個(gè)部分：首先是介紹自己的身份；然后寫留言的目的，包括冬令營的時(shí)間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽Liz Payne的講座；最后簡單介紹一下你的預(yù)期的收獲。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)根據(jù)題目的這些要求，組織語言，串聯(lián)成一篇短文。通過分析可知，這篇短文應(yīng)使用第一人稱I來敘述，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)以一般將來時(shí)態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。注意英語句子的表達(dá)和漢語習(xí)慣是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，使用正確的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以及適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型，保證句子的準(zhǔn)確性和語言的地道。另外還應(yīng)注意語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。穿插一些高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜句式，提升文章檔次和水平，使表達(dá)更加流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。作者主要從三個(gè)方面敘述：首先介紹了自己的身份和寫留言的目的；接下來詳細(xì)介紹了自己參加這次冬令營的愿望；最后是一個(gè)簡單的結(jié)尾。如果分段敘述效果則會(huì)更好，那樣會(huì)使文章的層次更加清晰。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，文章以第一人稱、一般將來時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，謂語動(dòng)詞形式準(zhǔn)發(fā)，語法規(guī)范，符合英語句子的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主，也使用了一些復(fù)合句和較高級(jí)的句型，如I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter ；From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals” February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter ；And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn 。整篇文章語句通順、意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。6．書面表達(dá)根據(jù)下列表格的提示，寫一篇題為Changes in Our Hometown的英語短文．（80詞左右）文章內(nèi)容必須包含所給的所有信息．開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：過去現(xiàn)在1舊房1高樓2河水骯臟2河水清澈（clean and clear）．3步行、騎自行車上班3乘公交車、小汽車上班4道路狹窄（narrow）．4街道寬闊（wide），干凈整潔5居住條件（livingconditions）差5生活越來越好，環(huán)境（environment）越來越舒適．6你的感想…（寫兩到三句）Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years，great changes have taken place in our hometown． 【答案】Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown. In the past, there used to be old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were terrible. People were not rich. They went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings in our hometown. We can see the clean river and the clear water . Even we can see fish in the water. There are many wide and clean roads. Our life is better and better The environment around us is more and more fortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car.I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. But I think it’s still important to remember the past. It tells that we should cherish the present life.【解析】【詳解】亮點(diǎn)說明：這篇習(xí)作的層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語，例如take place，in our hometown，in the past，used to be，go to do，on foot，by bike，better and better，more and more等。而I think it39。s still important to remember the past/It tells that we should cherish the present ，豐富了習(xí)作內(nèi)容，使表達(dá)多樣，是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)?！军c(diǎn)睛】書面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維，考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。7．隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展、人們消費(fèi)觀念的轉(zhuǎn)變， 購物方式也在悄然的發(fā)生變化?！熬W(wǎng)購”已成為一種時(shí)尚，越來越多的學(xué)生也加入到網(wǎng)購群體中。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格的提示，寫一篇網(wǎng)上購物的文章。優(yōu)點(diǎn)（advantage）；節(jié)約時(shí)間；避免擁擠、勞累，品種多缺點(diǎn)（disadvantage）， 看不到商品本身， 造成浪費(fèi)你的觀點(diǎn)……提示詞匯：網(wǎng)購shopping online。 商品 goods。 導(dǎo)致 cause注意：，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；；：100詞左右，文章開頭已給出，但不計(jì)入總數(shù)。With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. 【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are us