【正文】 . The government decides military salaries, and promotions are controlled by boards with the primary means of measurement being time in service. For this reason, I learned to manage through mutual respect. I believe it is much more important to gain the trust and confidence of your employees than to use direct pensation to motivate them.
Throughout my Marine Corps career and beyond I developed many strong leadership skills, but most of all I learned that to be effective as a manager one must remain focused on the human aspect of leadership. By concentrating too much on the goal and not on the people needed to meet it, leaders risk alienating their employees and thus failure in achieving the goal itself. By leveraging the lessons and qualities I gained while serving as an officer in the Marine Corps, I hope to meaningfully contribute to the academic environment at the Anderson School of Business.
點(diǎn)評：
本文是一篇表現(xiàn)了leadership skills的優(yōu)秀文書，可以顯示出作者是一個(gè)具有管理能力和技巧的MBA候選人。
MBA文書向來要求簡潔凝練，觀點(diǎn)集中，這篇文書首先就滿足了這些要求。海軍對于領(lǐng)導(dǎo)特質(zhì)的培養(yǎng)很重視，他們相信領(lǐng)導(dǎo)者不是天生的，而是經(jīng)過恰當(dāng)?shù)挠?xùn)練得到的。在我21歲的時(shí)候，我肩負(fù)的責(zé)任不僅僅是執(zhí)行任務(wù)，還有就是要確保下屬的生命安全和福利。我相信去獲取年輕員工的信任和信心遠(yuǎn)比通過獎(jiǎng)金來激勵(lì)他們更為重要。
我們看一下這篇文章的結(jié)構(gòu)：
第一部分，開頭。雖然很多東西都是專業(yè)的東西，但是結(jié)合他所說的東西并不顯得枯燥。這篇文章中我最喜歡的就是這點(diǎn)。
良好的文章結(jié)構(gòu)代表了良好的邏輯思維能力。那么怎么把你的文章組織好，用一個(gè)很好的線串聯(lián)起來。試問，這樣一份對于醫(yī)學(xué)的赤誠之心，有那位教授不會為之感動(dòng)呢?
開場：
應(yīng)該說，文章一開頭引用的一個(gè)實(shí)例是非常好的，因?yàn)閷τ谀切┍粩R淺的鯨的拯救行動(dòng)，完全是出于一種對于生命的尊重，并且每一個(gè)前去救助的人，都是出于自愿的。是的，同樣是因?yàn)檫@個(gè)原因，使我想要成為一個(gè)醫(yī)生。這些研究的結(jié)果不僅對于醫(yī)學(xué)進(jìn)步做出了貢獻(xiàn)，并且很大程度上使遭受此類神經(jīng)性損傷的患者造福。由于存在染色體的多余片段，他有一些輕微的智力低下。
回顧我所經(jīng)歷的一切，我意識到醫(yī)藥的實(shí)際應(yīng)用不僅僅對科學(xué)原理的熟識以及運(yùn)用，還有對精神上以及內(nèi)心的歷練，以及對生命發(fā)自內(nèi)心的尊重。
我有幸選擇了數(shù)學(xué)與應(yīng)用數(shù)學(xué)這個(gè)專業(yè)，在三年和它的接觸了解中，使我對數(shù)學(xué)，尤其對數(shù)學(xué)建模有了較深的理解和體會。比賽要求結(jié)合數(shù)據(jù)對長江水質(zhì)做出定量評價(jià)，分析各地區(qū)的水質(zhì)污染。
參加數(shù)學(xué)建模比賽的經(jīng)歷更加激發(fā)起我的學(xué)習(xí)興趣，使我在學(xué)習(xí)數(shù)學(xué)理論的同時(shí)更加注重它們的應(yīng)用性。傳統(tǒng)的運(yùn)輸問題、儲存問題和新興的模擬退火算法、螞蟻算法都曾成為我們的討論話題。更s重要的是，金融工程技術(shù)能給人們的生活、社會的穩(wěn)定、國家的發(fā)展做出重要貢獻(xiàn)，我想這個(gè)也更加符合我學(xué)習(xí)數(shù)學(xué)建模的初衷。
電工數(shù)模實(shí)習(xí)結(jié)束后，濃厚的學(xué)習(xí)興趣和電工數(shù)學(xué)實(shí)習(xí)的教訓(xùn)促使我和數(shù)學(xué)系、計(jì)算機(jī)系幾名同學(xué)共同籌劃并創(chuàng)建“數(shù)學(xué)建模沙龍”，將計(jì)算機(jī)算法和數(shù)學(xué)模型共同作為沙龍的主題。依賴于不拘一格的創(chuàng)新思維和創(chuàng)造能力。為期2周的數(shù)學(xué)建模培訓(xùn)，給我留下的不僅是一個(gè)個(gè)經(jīng)典的數(shù)學(xué)模型，更重要的是一份澎湃的激情和一份冷靜的思考：數(shù)學(xué)和數(shù)學(xué)建模是人類的守護(hù)神，因?yàn)橛辛怂拇嬖?，人類的生存和發(fā)展才有條不紊的繼續(xù)著。
篇三：金融工程專業(yè)自我陳述
英文版：In my opinion, the Financial Engineering is a kind of creative technology to the Financial Instruments, Financial Means and system. It used to balance the benefits and venture as an interesting interdisciplinary subject. It covers many fields such as mathematics, puter science and finance, in which the mathematics and mathematical modeling are the two main aspects of the Financial Engineering. The Investment Portfolio Theory of Markowitz, the capital asset pricing model of the Sharp, Option Pricing Model of BlackScholes and “Binomial” model of Cox can best reflect the critical position of the two subjects.
I am glad to choose mathematics and applied mathematics. Three years’ study had deepened my understanding of them, especially of mathematical modeling. (It still occurs to me when I went to attend the class of XX department given by Professor Jiang qiyuan in Tsinghua University for the first time. “1 kilogram of flour added with 1 kilogram of stuffing can make 100 dumplings, but what if the stuffing is more than 1 kilogram?” He used a very simple, vivid and interesting example which aroused my interest and led me into the mathematical modeling world.
The first time I kissed the mathematical modeling was in the summer vacation of 2005, when I got a good opportunity to attend the mathematical modeling training organized by our school. Seasoned mathematics teachers told me what on earth the mathematical modeling is through some existing examples, in which the one about SARS impressed me most. In 2003, SARS broke out and shrouded rapidly to the whole world, which imperiled our economic development and people’s living. Therefore, study on its spreading regularity and building the mathematical modeling for predicting and controlling its extension had bee the “Archimedes Heels” for all mathematicians… So, the Logistic regression has been carved in my memory. Two weeks’ training has presented me with a kind of passion and calm thinking much more than just those classical mathematical models. As the patron saint of our humanbeings, the existence of Mathematics and mathematical modeling are maintaining our subsistence and development. Then, when SARS ran riot, when we are suffering from the pain of AIDS, what can I do as a mathematics and mathematical modeling lover who loves life so much?
Pocketed with this passion and thinking, I tasted to use mathematical modeling into practice and solve the practical problems by attending the National College Mathematical Modeling Contest with the other two schoolmates on behalf of our college. It required us to evaluate the water quality of Changjiang River according to the data, through which we had to analyze the water pollution in every region and predict the trend of it in the future. Finally we had to bring out the plan against it. It was really a challenge for us towards flood of data and estimations as long as 17 pages. We tried almost a whole day only to filter those data and take the evaluations into prehensive account. Pulling down various models we had built before, we were so defeated that we wanted to give up many times. However, we finally found the satisfactory model thanks to our encouragement to each other which armed us with full strength to go managed to evaluate the water quality by Composite index model, which could not only represent the evaluation factors, but also reflect the main impacts of the contaminations to the water pollution. We predicted the future water pollution through multiple linear regressions fitting and brought out the plan against it by building linear optimization model. Finally, we got the second prize in Beijing for our thesis. Three days’ and nights’ modeling experience had cooled our passion and gave us even more calm thinking instead. The creation of the mathematical modeling, along with the successful solution to the problems through it lied on the solid mathematics foundation, strong modeling ability, accumulation of the knowledge on different fields, unique