【正文】 ore people are aware of the necessity of broadening their horizons. ? 分析： necessity后面的同位語從句顯得有點累贅，將其轉換成動名詞短語以后，句子結構更加緊湊，表達也更加簡單。簡單句、并列句和主從復合句都有松散句和掉尾句之分。掉尾句常用語強調或達到某種修飾效果。 我來練練 ? 1： We can win the battle against any other outbreak of calamities only by doing so. ? 優(yōu)化 ： Only by doing so, we can win the battle against any other outbreak of calamities. ? 2： Among the three cities, City B is what I like best. I think we should consider safety and climate first when we choose a city. ? 優(yōu)化 ： Among the three cities, what I like best is City B. When choosing a city, I think, we should consider safety and climate first. 我來練練 ? 3： Let alone the social development, the society will not be peaceful and stable without equality and justice. ? 優(yōu)化 ： Without equality and justice, the society will not be peaceful and stable, let alone the social development. ? 4： The everincreasing pressure produced by overcrowding is one big problem. ? 優(yōu)化 ： One big problem is the everincreasing pressure produced by overcrowding. 我來練練 ? 5： A new pattern of urban living has emerged in most big cities, as many of urban dwellers have moved to the suburban rings in search of cleaner air, greater privacy and a higher quality of life. ? 優(yōu)化 ： As many of urban dwellers have moved to the suburban rings in search of cleaner air, greater privacy and a higher quality of life, a new pattern of urban living has emerged in most big cities. 第五講 強調句和倒裝句 ? 一、強調句的使用 ? 寫作中常使用強調句來表達突出重點的目的。 ? 例 2： I hope people can realize the urgency to solve this problem as soon as possible. ? 優(yōu)化 ： I do hope people can realize the urgency to solve this problem as soon as possible. ? 分析：通過比較兩個句子可以發(fā)現(xiàn)，第一句是陳述句，第二句通過助動詞突出強調了句子的謂語動詞 hope，突出了愿望的強烈程度。此處用 question更合適。 ) ? 3. 注意詞語的習慣搭配 ? 例 1： The traffic in many big cities is getting more and more crowed. ? 優(yōu)化 ： The traffic in many big cities is getting heavier and heavier. ? 分析：在英語中，表達交通擁擠應該用 heavy一詞。 ? 例 2： Piracy has bee a phenomenon that can be seen everywhere. ? 優(yōu)化 ： Piracy has bee a prevailing phenomenon. ? 分析：第二句中用具體的形容詞 prevailing代替了第一句中的定語從句，更加形象生動地描述了這種現(xiàn)象。 ? 3. 動態(tài)動詞的使用 ? 要做到用詞形象生動，還要注意選擇具有動態(tài)意義的詞，這些表示具體動作的動態(tài)動詞往往比 be， there be， make， need等靜態(tài)動詞更有活力，可以達到更好的寫作效果。 ? 另外，為了增加文章的文采和避免重復，考生在寫作時要有意識地使用同義詞、同根詞、上義詞或下義詞來取代上文中出現(xiàn)過的詞匯。 ? The Shortage of Fresh Water Many people believe that the world’s supply of fresh water will never be used up. They hold that fresh water already es from such a variety of sources that it could never be insufficient for use. However, such an opinion leads to a shocking waste of water. As a matter of fact, we are short of fresh water. Furthermore, with the rapid growth of the world’s population, the rising demand for water by industry, and the serious pollution of our surroundings, the world is facing the danger of running out of fresh water. Actually, in some big cities, fresh water already cannot meet the daily needs. Therefore, it is urgent for us to find new ways to save fresh water. Above all, we should pass strict laws to prevent fresh water from being wasted. In addition, scientists must work even harder to purify sea water and polluted water, and try to find the substitute to reduce the use of fresh water. 我來練練 ? 1： Eating dumplings on the Eve of Lunar New Year is a national habit in China. (用近義詞替換 ) ? 優(yōu)化： Eating dumplings on the Eve of Lunar New Year is a national custom in China. ? 分析： habit一般指“個人或較小群體的習慣”， custom一般指“較大的社會群體的傳統(tǒng)習俗”，故此出用 custom更恰當。 我來練練 ? 5： After we have observed them carefully and analyzed them critically, we may identify the conceptions that will actually contribute to the social development. (用其他的詞性改寫 ) ? 優(yōu)化： Through careful observation and critical analysis, we may identify the conceptions that will actually contribute to the social development. ? 分析： 將原來的“動詞 +副詞”的結構改成“形容詞 +抽象名詞”的結構，擺脫了漢語的思維，使表達更地道生動，也更簡潔了。 我來練練 ? 3： The popularity of the beauty industry is because of the following reasons. (糾正錯誤搭配 ) ? 優(yōu)化： The popularity of the beauty industry is due to the following reasons. ? 分析： because和 reason一般不能夠搭配使用，故應將 because of換成 due to。 ? 四、注意過度銜接 ?