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er. And then we go outside and enjoy the full moon. The moon that night looks the brightest. With the beautiful moon up in the sky, we sit together to eat mooncakes, and share our stories.For me, the best part is to enjoy the moon and eat mooncakes. Mooncakes taste very delicious. They look like the moon, big and round.Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本篇寫作是以書信的方式向筆友介紹中國(guó)的傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日中秋節(jié),要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來寫。10.現(xiàn)在智能手機(jī)(smartphone)越來越普及,很多中學(xué)生都有智能手機(jī)。首先認(rèn)真審題,看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn);然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容,列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá);然后緊扣要點(diǎn),動(dòng)筆寫作。同時(shí)要注意語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu),造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣;盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式,最好不要寫太長(zhǎng)的復(fù)合句;盡量選取簡(jiǎn)單的易拼寫的單詞,確保正確率;詞匯、句式要豐富多樣,可以為文章增色添彩。提示:在生活中你用智能手機(jī)做什么?智能手機(jī)對(duì)你的生活產(chǎn)生了怎樣的影響?你對(duì)中學(xué)生使用智能手機(jī)有什么看法?______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文:The smartphone is being more and more popular nowadays .I also have a smartphone .I usually use it to send text messages, play games,watch videos, listen to music and learn English .It is very useful and convenient. In fact,the smartphone makes my life colorful. However ,every coin has two I spend too much time playing games on the smartphone and get bad results in exams. So I think we students should use our smartphones properly and don’t use them too much .We should pay more attention to our studies.【解析】【詳解】這是一篇給材料作文,要求根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示,寫一篇英語短文,談一談你對(duì)智能手機(jī)的看法。亮點(diǎn)說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如get together,enjoy the full moon, share our stories等。Dear Jessica, I39。9.李華的英國(guó)筆友Jessica來信說, 她想了解中國(guó)的傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日中秋節(jié)。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析:這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文,需要逐條完成要點(diǎn)問題的回答,描述一次自己讓別人開心快樂的經(jīng)歷,是一篇記敘文,首先要讀懂5個(gè)問題,其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言和銜接手段把這五個(gè)問題的回答聯(lián)系在一起,變成一篇短文,同時(shí)也要注意在描述過去的故事的時(shí)候要正確運(yùn)用過去時(shí)態(tài)。以及狀語從句等;然后緊扣要點(diǎn),動(dòng)筆寫作,在寫作過程中,要注意句與句、段與段之間的過渡,必要時(shí)可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞,使文章過渡平穩(wěn),自然流暢;最后,要仔細(xì)檢查有無單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)誤用等,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。例文點(diǎn)評(píng):例文采用的是三段式;用第一人稱來敘述為改善環(huán)境我們能做什么;時(shí)態(tài)采用的是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),描述建議時(shí),描寫具體,條理清晰。7.環(huán)境保護(hù)人人有責(zé), 如果我們每一個(gè)人都能珍愛美麗地球 保護(hù)自然資源,相信我們的家園會(huì)越來越美好。寫作中注意敘述順序,符合邏輯關(guān)系。你通過微信告知她:要去哪,在那要做什么以及何時(shí)何地見面。亮點(diǎn)說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),主謂一致,在文中使用了時(shí)間狀語從句,定語從句,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如have fun,in order to,as for,in my opinion等。寫作中注意語義通順,符合邏輯關(guān)系。Safety has bee the focus to us all. How to be safe at school is especially important to us ______